It needs work and a make over i think
I am not an authority on this, yet, but:
Pre-loader sucked, there was not too much to the animation, it was very rudementary.
People don't wanna read boring fonts, use something more exciting and eye catching
The kitchen scene is, for want of a better word, crap, C - R - A - P.
I had to spell it for you, sorry man but soften it up a bit, the hard angles and the almost all white scene take a lot out of the scene, with softer colours, you'd be surprised what would work, purples and greens and so fourth, you would be surprised at what would work.
The "Movie" is not very well programed and is full of bugs, the film is better than to only one i have submited but it was not meant to be good and was done near the start of my animation experiance.
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